Friday Fictioneers: The Summoning

This is my entry for this week’s Friday Fictioneers Challenge run by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. This week’s picture prompt was provided by Jennifer Pendergast The challenge is to write a story within 100 words.

Photo Prompt - Copyright Jennifer Pendergast
Photo Prompt – Copyright Jennifer Pendergast

The Summoning 

He awoke to sterile rooms and white-coated doctors.

After seven years adrift in a pleasant fog – waiting, always waiting – the haze dispersed with the awareness that it is time!

William fled the mental hospital as soon as possible. The doctors wanted him to remain, wanted to poke and prod until his condition was understood, but he knew he had to go. He had to go south.

He met Sophia on the train: a waif of a girl with scared eyes, driven by the same compulsion as he to reach an unknown destination.

At least they wouldn’t be reaching it alone.

Word Count: 100

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While I’m hoping this story works as a stand-alone, it’s actually a companion piece to Waiting, yesterday’s FFfAW story. This one may make a little more sense if you read that as well.

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25 Comments on “Friday Fictioneers: The Summoning

  1. I wonder how many others from all places and walks of life will join them before they reach their destination?
    Great and mysterious story!

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  2. I love the ‘waif of a girl with scared eyes.’
    They sound like lambs to the slaughter – make them turn round!
    Very threatening and mysterious.

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    • I wish I could – the compulsion driving them is just too strong! Thanks for visiting. 🙂

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  3. Great story…it really makes you want to know where are they going and what are they going to do when they get there? It is quite baffling!

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    • Thank you! I’ll probably be writing a third part of this sometime soon that may answer some of your questions…

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  4. There was a scene in a sci-fi movie years ago that a guy was making a mountain on his plate of mashed potatoes. I think maybe someone or something is calling them for real and he woke up from a coma. Interesting story! Nan

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    • I was discussing different directions I could take this with a friend as I wrote it yesterday. The obvious one is aliens. My response to that was ‘I don’t want it to be too mashed potato mountain!’ I think the film is Close Encounters of the Third Kind… I do have quite a few different ideas for what is calling them – hopefully it won’t be too predictable. Thanks for visiting. 🙂

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  5. You said a lot in 100 words. Excellent. I liked the description of Sophia too and I’m glad they’ve got each other to keep them company.

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    • At least neither of them will be facing whatever’s at their destination alon! Thanks for visiting. 🙂

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  6. Like the first, this is very interesting and well written. It is clever how you linked them together (the use of the word “waiting” for both is a great link), and this makes me wonder where they are going and what compulsion is driving them to go.

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    • Thank you, Francesca. I’m glad you liked it. 🙂 I’m hoping to write a third (and hopefully final) part this week.

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  7. “At least they wouldn’t be reaching it alone.” I wonder who else is with them?
    On the train or in their minds?
    Evocative — I would like to know if they reached what they thought was their destination.

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    • You ask some good questions. Hopefully they’ll be answered in a part three sometime soon. 🙂

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