MftS & SPF: A Sister’s Love

This post is in response to both Monday’s Finish the Story and the Sunday Photo Fiction flash fiction challenges, run by and Alistair Forbes, respectively. Monday’s Finish the Story, run by Barbara W. Beacham gives  a picture prompt and the first line and asks that you finish the story in 100-150 words. The given line is in italics. Alistair Forbes Sunday Photo Fiction challenge gives a photo prompt and asks that you complete the story in around 200 words.

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2015-08-24 – Photo taken of an old photo in 2014 – Barbara W. Beacham

A Sister’s Love

The family had no idea that little Luigi would grow up to be anything special.

After all, how could he, with blood tainted by an unmarried, working-class mother? His arrogant relatives rarely missed an opportunity to remind him that they fed and clothed an orphaned by-blow out of charity alone. Even decades later the pain of their disregard stung.

Only Edith had supported him.

Luigi touched gnarled fingers to the faded face of his beloved half-sister, the picture drawing him to days nearly a century past.

“My success was all because of her,” he told the biographer scribbling notes.

Edith’s affection never wavered, despite her mother’s disdain. She’d dried his tears and encouraged his play among the cogs and wheels, uncaring of the smears of grease; she’d praised his strange contraptions. Later she’d used her own allowance to augment the pittance granted to him, allowing him to follow his dreams of intricate clockwork.

Without her he’d never have become one of the world’s greatest horologists.

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An intricate wristwatch – © Alistair Forbes

Word Count: 150

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43 Comments on “MftS & SPF: A Sister’s Love

  1. Very creative!
    Beautifully tackling two prompts. Powerful words creating a strong picture in reader’s mind 🙂

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    • I’m glad you liked it, Chioma. 🙂 Without his sister’s love his life may well have turned out very differently! Thanks for visiting.

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    • It wasn’t a happy upbringing but at least he had his sister! Thanks for visiting. 🙂

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    • Thank you! I’ve never combined prompts before and found it a very enjoyable task! I’m very glad you liked the end result. 🙂

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    • I’m glad you enjoyed it! Learning new words is always fun. 🙂 I’ll check out your prompt – I do like to have a number of them to choose from. Unfortunately, I generally only write a couple of flash fics each week so whether I write a response or not is another matter. 🙂

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      • I just write to prompts. I tried once trying to have something for folks to respond too. I like writing pieces better.

        So many good prompts – so little time 🙂

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  2. Very nice story. No matter how badly one is treated, often times if they have one person that believes in them and supports them emotionally it can completely change the outcome of their life…and that act of compassion and support is never forgotten….like in Luigi’s case.

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  3. Nicely done Louise, it is so often amazing what a little encouragement and praise will do for you….

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    • All it takes is a bit of support and encouragement for you to be given the scaffolding to reach your highest potential. I’m glad you liked it, Michael. 🙂

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  4. Bitter sweet story. I hope he destroyed his nasty relatives in the biography 🙂
    You merged the two prompts seamlessly.

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    • I’m sure he did – it’s just a shame none of them were still around to read it! Thanks for visiting, Ali. 🙂

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    • I’m glad you liked it, Ineke! Family can give either the support structure to help you achieve provide the shackles that hold you back. Luigi was lucky to have his sister. His life may have been very different without her. Thanks for visiting. 🙂

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    • Thank you very much! I’m glad you enjoyed it. It’s always great to know that people like what I’m producing. 🙂

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  5. You wove these prompts together effortlessly. One does not need to wonder where he would have ended up without his sister.

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    • Thank you, Francesca. Without his sister his life would have definitely been much different. 🙂

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  6. Very well done Louise. I loved the way you tied the two challenges together. Thanks for the addition to my line up and I hope that you return for the next one. Be well… ^..^

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  7. What a lovely story 🙂 I always like stories about sisters and brothers and their love.

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