The Ways of the Paths

Mira ran, placing each foot with care.

Angry shouts sounded behind her. She gritted her teeth and forced her legs to move faster. The consequences, should they catch her, didn’t bear consideration.

She didn’t look back. After all, she was of the Bakiai, and the Bakiai always looked forward. That was how their paths stayed true.

She’d learned the ways of the paths as all children of the tribe did, pacing the winding routes through the mud flats at her elders’ heels – over and over – until each footfall could be placed with precision, even on the narrowest of trails. She utilized that training now, as she raced along the most treacherous path she knew. And she tried not to consider her pursuers fates.

All of the Bakiai knew the horror stories, knew of the creatures that dwelt beneath the fluid earth. Anyone who stepped off the paths became their prey.

Angry shouts shifted to terrified screams.

Mira bared her teeth in triumph. Only the Bakiai knew the ways of the paths. No invader ever would.

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This post is for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. This week’s photo prompt was provided by Yinglan. Thank you, Yinglan.

16 Comments on “The Ways of the Paths

  1. Wow, this is great! I knew something was coming when it said “she tried not to consider her pursuers fates.” Wonderful story, Louise!

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    • Thanks, PJ. There are nasty things beneath that mud! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂

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    • Thank you, Jeanne. 🙂 I didn’t think I was going to write anything for this week’s prompt at first, but this story burbled away at the back of my brain for a few days before it insisted on being written! I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  2. I love that she uses the creatures they fear to her advantage against perhaps an even worse enemy. Dramatic action, well done.

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    • Mira is a resourceful woman. She’ll use what she has to. Thanks for reading, Iain. I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂

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  3. Handy knowledge to have. She may have “tried not to consider her pursuers fates” but I did. Most satisfying 🙂

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    • I generally find that these things are best left to the reader’s imagination. 😀 I’m sure they deserve everything that happens to them!

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  4. I really liked this story. And it reminded me of the marshes where I played as a child. Great but no monsters.

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    • They are. And the monsters will be having a good feast so hopefully they’ll be sated for a little while, as well. Thanks for reading, Nona. 🙂

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