FFfAW: Inconspicuous

This post is for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers, a flash fiction challenge that asks you to write a flash fiction of 75-175 words based on the photo prompt below. This week’s prompt was provided by S. Writings.

Photo prompt -Β© S. Writings


“They’re staring at us.”

“Oh, I’m sure they’re not, boss.”

Fingers pointed. Eyes clearly followed them as their vehicle trundled through the miserable backwater. “I’m sure they are.” He narrowed his eyes, glaring first at his idiotic underling and then out at the gawking crowds. “I said I wanted to be inconspicuous. This is not inconspicuous.”

“It’s probably just ’cause we’re strangers, boss.”

“Hmm.” He gritted his teeth. Striking the fool wouldn’t help matters. “Are you certain we’re camouflaged correctly?”

“Certain-sure, boss. I followed the instructions exactly. This place might be backwards but their information network ain’t bad. I found a picture of one of their au-to-mo-biles and programmed it into the computer, just like you said.Β Computer’s handling our appearances, as well. We look just like the apes, not a tentacle in sight.”

Finally arriving at their destination, V’lod, former emperor of the universe, exited his disguised spaceship. His gaze fell on the vehicle’s vivid designs.

“Inconspicuous?” He scowled at his only remaining subject.

This didn’t bode well for the rest of his exile.

Word Count:Β 175

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28 Comments on “FFfAW: Inconspicuous

    • I don’t think they will either. πŸ™‚ I’m glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write something that was quite different to my usual flashes. Thanks for a great prompt!


  1. Fun story, Louise. I can picture them driving around in the deep south of the United States for some reason. Inconspicuous, indeed!

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    • I tried not to place them anywhere in particular in the world, just somewhere on Earth, that way people can imagine them driving around anywhere they wish. πŸ™‚ I’m glad you enjoyed the read!

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  2. Hahaha! I can just see this spaceship painted like the car in the prompt photo! LOL! I would be upset too! Great story, Louise!

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    • He’s definitely not happy. Unfortunately if he takes it out on his underling he’ll be a former emperor with no subjects at all! I’m glad you liked it, Rosema. Thanks for visiting. πŸ™‚

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  3. Poor V’lod. Emperor of the Universe to hippy car owner. I hope he knows how to program because their computer could use some work! They’d probably have attracted less attention if they’d left it looking like a spaceship. Very amusing πŸ™‚

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    • V’lod is definitely feeling the change in his status! I think if he’d programmed the computer himself he wouldn’t have had a problem. Leaving it to his underling was probably a mistake… πŸ™‚ I’m glad you enjoyed it Ali. I felt a little as if I was channelling you as I wrote it – it’s not my usual type of story at all!

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  4. If that was suppose to be inconspicuous, I would love to see what it looked like if it was conspicuous! LOL’s. πŸ˜„


    • It’s not often that I get the urge to write a humorous piece! I’m glad you enjoyed it, Ellespeth. πŸ™‚


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