
Winter’s Child
He had to wait for winter to arrive. Or so they told him. The summer, they said, belonged to others. He had to wait for the air to turn chilly and the wind biting; for the frost to form on the trees. Only then would it be his time.
But the summer seemed without end.
He willed the leaves to begin their change – the shift to golden browns would herald the approach of colder days. But disappointment dogged him. No matter how he hoped and wished and prayed, how he yearned for the seasons to shift, the green of summer remained dominant.
All the while, children laughed and played in bright sunshine, while he looked on.
He had to wait for the days when children wore warm coats to play outside, bundled up in hats, scarves and gloves. And when maybe, just maybe, the snow would fall and they’d build snowmen in the park.
First, though, the long summer had to end.
Charlie scowled. It wasn’t fair.
He wanted it to be his birthday now!
Word count: 175
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This post is for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. This week’s prompt was provided by Ioniangraphics. Thank you for the prompt!
I hadn’t intended to post anything this week – mainly because I haven’t managed to respond to any of the comments on my last post yet (sorry) – but the words came into my head last night and wouldn’t leave me alone until I’d written them down. It seemed a shame not to share it.
I hope you like it. And I’ll try to respond to some comments and visit a few blogs this evening!
OH I enjoyed this!! Was trying to figure out what the person was waiting for. Smiled at the ending, was a nice surprise! I so remember it seeming to take forever for my birthday to come when I was young. Now as adults we would like time to slow down!! π
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Thanks, Joy. I run kids parties for a living, so I meet a lot of children who find it hard to wait for their birthday to arrive. I’m glad you enjoyed it. π
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And here was I thinking it was some sort of frost demon… π
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That’s the direction I hoped people’s thoughts would go in – especially considering my usual stories! I like to keep people on their toes. π Thanks for visiting, Ali.
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You had me all through this. I love the ending!
The Snow
Annie at ~McGuffy’s Reader~
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Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it. π
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I hope you will visit and comment, too. I am new here, but not to writing.
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I love the buildup to that ending! I hear ya Charlie boy, sometimes birthdays just seem very very far away
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I’m glad you shared your thoughts Louise, enjoyed where you took me.
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That is a lovely ending. Delectable read.
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lovely Louise! I know the feeling so well too, waiting for a birthday and cake and candles, the child in us never really goes away
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Ha, and I thought it was just because he loved the snow! π
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This made me smile and reminds me of one of my boys who always counts the months and days to his birthday π
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I was thinking he was Jack Frost…so glad he is a kid with a winter birthday. π
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I smiled when I read this story, lovely
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A very entertaining way to express someone’s desire for the arrival of their birthday. π
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Thank you. π
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I was picturing another winter god/fairy type story all throughout, and then the end. Brilliant way to play it up.
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Thank you. π
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Loved your story, especially the repetitive style of beginning of almost every sentence with the third person singular He. It leads to a cadence and builds up the scene very well. Also the last line was so perfect. Well done.
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Thank you. I’m glad you liked it, Neel. π
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