
Waiting
“Why are you here?” he asked, even though he knew the answer.
“I’m waiting for you.” Her heels clunked against the cabinet in a familiar rhythm. “I’ll wait forever if I have to.”
“I won’t be long now.” Ephemeral fingers traced his aged cheek before she faded from view.
This post is for Sonya’s Three Line Tales challenge. I’ve interpreted the ‘three lines’ instruction a little more loosely this week – it’s three lines of dialogue with accompanying descriptions. 🙂
Why can’t I like the story?
Brilliantly written.
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For some reason the ‘Show Like Button’ was off. :S I’ve just turned it back on again. Thank you for mentioning it, Chioma – I would have just assumed people didn’t like it!
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🙂
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That’s not possible, you’re a brilliant writer.
Glad to have helped.
Have a great week.
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Thank you, Chioma. That’s lovely of you to say. 😀 ❤ I hope you have a great week too!
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Wonderful!
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Thank you, Sabina. 🙂
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Very nice! I get the feeling she has waited a very long time since he was rubbing his aged cheek. So much said with few words.
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Thanks, Jessie. 🙂 I think you’re right – she’s waited a very long time. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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This is amazing!
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Thank you, Sarah. 🙂
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Of course!
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Beautiful, is it death, waiting for him?
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That’s one possibility. 🙂 Thanks for visiting, Mandi.
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I was thinking maybe the spirit of a daughter or wife waiting, but mandibelle’s comment brings up another possibility! Lovely 🙂
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One of the things I love so much about flash fiction is that their brevity means so much is left open to the reader’s interpretation. I hadn’t even thought of that possibility myself but I like it! I’m glad you enjoyed the read, Ali. 🙂
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Sweet, sad love story – gorgeous
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Wonderful TLT, Louise! It made me wonder, who is waiting for who?
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I like this, there is so much I can think of to fill in here! Lovely
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Thanks, Lynn. I like how much you can leave to the reader’s own imagination with these little flashes. 🙂
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yes I really like this and thought up all kinds of scenarios! Well done
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This is beautiful. A stunning story in so few words 🙂
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Sorry it’s taken me a while to add you to the round-up – all done now! Beautiful lines 🙂
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Now who could be it!!?? Nice one.. 🙂
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Now that would be telling! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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