MftS: The Bare Bones

Here’s this week’s entry into Monday’s Finish the Story flash fiction challenge, run by Barbara W. Beacham. This challenge gives you a picture prompt and the first line and asks that you finish the story in 100-150 words. The given line is in italics.

Photo Prompt: © 2015 Barbara W. Beacham
Photo Prompt: © 2015 Barbara W. Beacham

The Bare Bones

The cemetery spread along the area known as Devil’s Abode. Some knew it by a different name: The Gateway, home to the King of Bones.

The group paraded in solemn order, Andrew’s coffin borne aloft. Will’s despair grew with every step he took. Had he not left early, not been distracted by seductively swaying hips, he could have stopped them – his brother would still be alive.

Tears dampened his cheeks as they entered the mausoleum, descending into darkness. For centuries their family had interred their dead within the chamber below, the underworld’s guardian assuring the departed soul’s safe passage.

“Farewell, brother,” Will murmured as they placed Andy’s casket before the king upon his skeletal throne.

Piercing eyes glinted as the ancient being turned his gaze in Will’s direction: uncovering truth; easing guilt. A voice rumbled through his mind. “No blame lies with you, wise protector. The brave one made his own choices.”

Will bowed his head, accepting absolution.

Word Count: 150

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21 Comments on “MftS: The Bare Bones

  1. You painted a very vivid scene with words. I enjoyed this very much so!

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  2. I liked the way you blended, the new, the old and the mystique. Good one.

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    • Thank you. 🙂 I’ve always been fascinated by folklore and the strange figures in the old stories and wanted to create a sense of that. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  3. I like “the King of Bones”.
    It’s good to be absolved of blame but I expect deep down he will still blame himself. Great spooky story!

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    • Thanks, Ali. 🙂 He was originally going to be called ‘the Lord of Bones’ but then I discovered there’s a Game of Thrones character who goes by that name! You’re right, he’ll likely carry a sense of blame for a very long time. I probably should have written that the King somehow removed his guilt… Hmm…That might be a future edit…

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  4. Loved the implications of absolution. Well done. tombs are scary on their own, but a being to oversee the bones of he dead spooky!

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  5. Loved your take to the prompt! All the guilt his brother was feeling was relieved of him. Great images and great word playing! Love it!

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  6. great work Louise, a very enjoyable read 🙂 the mausoleum reminded me a bit of Game of Thrones, where the Starks buried their dead in Winterfell..

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    • Thank you. 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it. I hadn’t noticed that similarity, though I can see it now – Game of Thrones is hard to avoid sometimes!

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