Friday Fictioneers: The Origins of a Dream

This is my entry for this week’s Friday Fictioneers Challenge run by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. This week’s picture prompt was provided by Santoshwriter. The challenge is to write a story within 100 words.

Photo Prompt - © Santoshwriter
Photo Prompt – © Santoshwriter

The Origins of a Dream

“Maybe he’s mad,” Joey whispered, peering through the tangled branches where they crouched. He shivered, though he told himself it was because of the dew dripping down his neck.

The old groundsman’s voice droned continuously in meandering reminiscences, his movements  achingly slow as he snipped withered flowers from stems.

Charlie sniggered. “As a coot!”

“Maybe he chops people’s heads off.”

“Maybe he’ll chop your head off.”

“Or maybe,” the groundsman interrupted, “he’ll tell you boys to quit hiding under a shrub and to help an old man out.”

His tales of bygone days continued as they trailed him around the park.

Word Count: 100


Today’s story is a companion piece to yesterday’s FFfAW entry, The Price of a Dream. As I mentioned yesterday, that story was cut down from 400 to 175 words to fit the word limit. In order to do that I had to edit out several things – one of which was the character of the old groundsman. I was rather sad about losing him as it was he who inspired the twins to become groundsmen themselves and his stories that drove them to regenerate the park. Luckily I was able to reuse him, and the twins, today.

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26 Comments on “Friday Fictioneers: The Origins of a Dream

  1. I recycle characters that either wouldn’t fit or don’t cooperate with the story. It leaves me with a story waiting to happen.

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  2. Can the “old coot” and the kids be the subject an occasional story in the future?

    Old folks do seem to have eyes and ears all over their body…..LOL
    Love it. Another twist and turn I was not expecting….sweet.

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    • They may well do so! I’m actually trying to write a collection of short stories to put on Amazon and they might make an appearance there as well. 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.

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  3. Nice characters, and appealing dialogue. I like this very much. It feels like a slice of something bigger.

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    • Thank you, Margaret. 🙂 These characters may well make an appearance in something bigger.

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  4. I have characters that come and go — over the course of many months sometimes.
    I really enjoyed the edited out groundsman. Thanks for bringing him back to life.

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  5. I’d love to hear the old man’s stories, too. Beautiful take on the prompt, such fun characters.

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  6. You have that talent to make words speak to us (your readers)! I wish you put the unabridged version of your story up as well. They are joy to read!

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