
Victim?
she felt sick
seeing him there
performing his songs
as if he didn’t have a care in the world
after everything he’d put her through
everything he’d done
to her
and to those she loved
seeing him so blithely carefree
set her guts to roiling
*
she carried the knife in her bag
for protection
she didn’t feel safe any more
not since that night
that dreadful night
when he’d trampled over her life
that hellish night when
all her personal liberties had been
infringed
and all her illusions destroyed
*
she didn’t remember
afterwards
taking hold of the knife
as she approached the figure who
haunted her nightmares
but she would always remember the
feel of the blade sinking deep into flesh
and the rush of satisfaction as
the spark of life
faded from his shocked gaze
Word Count: 136
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This post is for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. This week’s photo prompt was provided by Sunayama MoiPensieve. Thank you, Sunayama!
I’ve actually had this little piece written for a few days. I just wasn’t sure for a while whether to post it as it is or to turn it into prose. I eventually decided, after asking my Mum (Millie Thom) for advice, that I’d leave it in the form it initially came to me in. I hope you liked it.
A great story about vengence, Louise! I can feel the anger and hatred towards him in the words. Great story!
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Thanks, PJ. I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
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It’s a very different kind of story than you usually write. Very good!
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I’ve been in a bit of a dark mood lately. I wanted to write a happier piece but this one wouldn’t leave me alone! Thanks again, PJ.
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You have to write those stories that won’t leave you alone! 🙂 Sorry you are in such a dark mood.
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Very cool and gritty!
It must make things so much worse for people seeing their abuser just carrying on with daily life like nothing had happened.
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My imagination took a rather dark turn last week! I think seeing your abuser like that would be the worst thing possible. Thanks for reading, Ali. 🙂
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Wow. Such a punch. That’s what poetry should do. So tragic. You did a marvelous job.
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Thank you very much, Russell. This was very different to my usual poetry so I’m glad it worked. 🙂
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Fabulous Louise…fabulous and scary and brutal and raw…wow.
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Thank you for a lovely comment, Jeanne. This was a bit outside of my comfort zone so I’m very glad you liked it. 🙂
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Wow, cold and brutal revenge. Expertly expressed.
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I’m very glad you liked it, Iain. It was somewhat out of my comfort zone! Thanks for visiting. 🙂
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Greatly written ..actually building up the anger in the reader and a sense of satisfaction of the outcome.
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Thank you, Jessie. I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
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Nice and darkly done Louise. Revenge takes time, but is sweet when it comes
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Thanks, Lynn. My imagination has been taking a darker turn quite a bit lately! I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
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My pleasure Louise. Long may darkness reign! 🙂
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😀
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What a brutal chilling experience. Well written.
I am leaving a link to my YouTube video in the comments. Thank you for checking it out.
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Thank you, Jacqueline. 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it. I don’t have a great internet connection at the moment but I’ll try to check out your YouTube link later.
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