Puddle Splashing
“What are you doing?”
Mikey pulled a face. What a daft question. “I’m splashing in puddles, of course.” He was tempted to add ‘silly girl’, but Mummy said he should be nice, even when he didn’t want to be.
“Why?”
“Because it’s fun.” He leapt towards the next puddle.
“Can I have a go?”
Sighing, Mikey looked the girl up and down. With her blonde ringlets, frilly white dress, and delicate slippers, she looked like a fairytale princess. “Not dressed like that, you can’t. Ain’t you got any wellies?”
“Wellies?”
He pointed at his own pair, perfect for puddle splashing. The girl shook her head. Mikey wrinkled his nose in thought.
“Well, you could borrow mine. For a while.” He glanced to where flashing lights and a gathering crowd marked the place of his accident. “Just don’t jump in any puddles on the road. A car might hit you. That’s what happened to me.”
“I won’t,” the girl said. “That’s what happened to me, too. Roads are even more horrid now than when I died.”
Word count: 175
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This post is for the 100th challenge for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for the Aspiring Writers. Congratulations, PJ, on reaching 100 weeks of this wonderful challenge. This week’s prompt was provided by Jessica Haines. Thank you Jessica. 🙂
This story actually took me by surprise. I intended to write about a child (Mikey) meeting a ghost. I wasn’t expecting them both to be ghosts, but that’s the direction it decided to go. Sorry if it’s a little depressing…
An Enchanted Place 
That was very sweet right up until the end 🙂
Well, I guess it was still sweet that they’re playing together as ghosts. Mikey seems quite okay with it all, even though he’s evidently “newly dead”.
Great story!
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Children are resilient – even after death, it seems! I’m glad you liked it, Ali. Thanks for visiting. 🙂
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Lovely story – though some may not agree – kids anywhere need a friend to splash in a puddle and so sweet of them to caution to each other -like don’t get hit again or I will lose the only friend here – love how you told the story without it sounding weird and spooky!
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Thank you, Gina. Every child needs a friend – even ghostly ones. I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Brilliant piece; lovely characters! Really didn’t see it going the way it did, caught me off guard in a good way!
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The ending was unexpected, but I love how you brought the characters to life in so little words! It’s touching, in its own strange way.
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This was brilliant! Great write!
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Thank you. 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
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Loved it. 😊
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Thank you, Sabina. 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
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Oh no! So sad! Loved the story Louise! So sad to know they are both dead because of being hit by cars.
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I love those unexpected endings and you did this so smoothly. Sad yes but well done!
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It is such a surprise to realise that this is a ghost story. Well done
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A totally unexpected ending! Great story! 🙂
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Superbly written! The twist at the end was chilling.
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Thank you, Magarisa. I’m very glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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You’re welcome, Louise. 😊
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Isn’t it always a treat when a story takes you in a direction you never intended to go.
Glad the ghostly children can play well together.
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Sometimes stories seem to have a life of their own! Thanks for reading, Nona. 🙂
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