This post is for the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) Challenge, run by Priceless Joy. This week’s photo prompt was provided by Dawn M. Miller. Thank you Dawn! The challenge is that you write a story of 75-175 words inspired by the photo prompt below. I hope you like it.
What Lies Beyond
“For centuries we’ve lived in tyranny!” The voice had been bell-like, an awakening chime over the rally. “We’ve huddled behind city walls, believing their lies, for too long. Are we children to believe in monsters lurking in the wilderness?”
With the passionate words of the protest leader echoing through his mind, Marcus stared excitedly through the broken panel at the forbidden land beyond. The covered walkways that connected the city and outlying compounds had been growing increasingly dilapidated lately but he’d never expected to find a hole large to climb through.
“The ruling council wants to keep us living in fear but it is in the wilderness that we can find our freedom!”
Barely hesitating, he scrambled through and dropped to the ground below.
He didn’t see his attacker – merely felt the impact as it forced him to the ground. Sharp claws tore through flesh. Pain ricocheted, an agonised cry wrenching from his throat.
The smug face of the high-councillor swam into view. “Maybe they’ll believe in monsters now.”
His world faded to black.
Word Count: 175
This story was very hard to write in only 175 words! I’ve written and re-written it five or six times, not to mention edited this final version down from nearly 250 words. It was supposed to have been posted yesterday but, well – that didn’t happen. I hope you all like it. I also hope it makes sense…
Very imaginative way to use the bridge. Great job!
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Thank you, Mandibelle. 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
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Excellent Louise! So sad at the end! Marcus was fearless to take the first steps into freedom. How sad that the darn monster had to show up! Great story Louise and thank you for participating in the FFfAW challenge!
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Thanks P.J. I think the monster only showed up because the members of the council wanted it to – if there was even any monster other than the high-councillor himself! I’m glad you enjoyed the read. 🙂
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Oh, I see! The high counselor might have been the monster. Very unique! I like that twist!
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Thanks! It was rather hard making everything clear in the 175 words!
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Very well done on the use of the prompt! Mind drifted to the film the village… Great work!
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I’m glad you like it! I hadn’t thought about ‘The Village’ but you’re right, there’s a definite similarity. 🙂 Thanks for visiting.
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Good story. I hope you kept all the versions! You never know what you might do with them later … 🙂
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Thank you Graham! I did keep the other versions – I never delete anything! Thanks for visiting. 🙂
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Love your site. Lovely banner and great drawings. My wife is a fan and does a lot of colouring so I printed a few out for her. She says thank you!
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Thank you, Graham. 🙂 I’m very glad you and your wife like it!
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Very clever twist at the end there. To me, that symbolises how the real demons are the ones we may come into contact with every day.
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I’m glad you liked it, Francesca. The worst monsters are also the ones who pretend to be acting on your best behalf. Thank you for your insightful comment. 🙂
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I enjoyed this, great story! I love the twist you put on it. 🙂
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Thank you, Jessie. 🙂
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Excellent tale Louise with so much potential…..
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Thank you, Michael. 🙂 I could easily make a much longer story out of this – it was really hard to write in so few words! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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The ruling council knows best! Though it may be them who are controlling the monster I guess – it’s hard to give up absolute power, and those who wield it usually need something to keep the “underlings” in check 🙂
Another great fantasy story!
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The ruling council is desperate to keep hold of the reins of power! I’m glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for visiting. 🙂
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How could you?! I was cheering him on! Not only was he crushed, but so was I. In so few words, you managed to hook and pull me along to the shocking, horrifying end.
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Sorry – I couldn’t resist! You never know, he might not be dead. He could be found and healed by a group of people who live outside the city walls, to someday return and expose the ruling council’s machinations… I’m very glad you enjoyed the story (until the end). 🙂
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I loved this story! Different and captivating! I almost believe in monsters now 🙂
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Thank you for your lovely comment. 🙂 I’m very glad you liked it! Thanks for visiting.
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My pleasure, entirely!
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Oh nice! Lesson learned!
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I’m glad you liked it. 🙂 Thanks for visiting.
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I won’t be crossing that one! great story Louise!
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Definitely one to avoid! Thanks for visiting, Cybele. 🙂
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