FFfAW: Complete

This post if for the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) Challenge, run by Priceless Joy. This week’s picture was provided by Vanessa Rodriguez. The challenge is that you write a story of 75-175 words inspired by the photo prompt below. I hope you all like it.

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Photo prompt: © Vanessa Rodriguez

Complete

Smiling in satisfaction, Samuel positioned the last figure on the platform. It had taken months of work but his model railway was finally finished.

The day’s last light streamed in through the attic window, lighting the scene with a gentle touch. The sounds of the house drifted to his ears: Freddie and Alex squabbled over toys; Lily warbled nursery rhymes to her dolls; his beloved Jennifer clattered pots in the kitchen. They were sounds he loved to hear.

Flicking a switch, he set the trains in motion.

“Have you boys been in the attic again?” Jennifer’s shouted. Silence briefly fell.

“Nope.”

“Not me!”

“Then why can I hear your father’s trains?”

A moment later Jennifer stormed into the room, Freddie and Alex trailing behind.

“Boys?”

“Still weren’t us, Mum.”

Absently flicking off the trains, Jennifer brushed her fingers over the newly completed station.

It had still been incomplete when he died.

Samuel smiled as Lily toddled into the room. “Daddy!” she chirped happily, looking right at him.

He set the trains back in motion.

Word Count: 175

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23 thoughts on “FFfAW: Complete

    1. I don’t really know where the photo prompt was taken – it’s by Vanessa Rodriguez – but I’ve googled Balboa Park Station and it does look like it could be there. 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed the story.

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    1. Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. I didn’t think I was going to join in with your challenge this week – I usually do either this or the Friday Fictioneers prompt – but this idea took me before I’d even finished writing yesterday’s story and wouldn’t leave me alone!

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  1. You’ve captured the magical realism genre quite well with this. It’s believeable at first, then twists to the ghosty/magical side and back and forth. It’s a goal for me to write more like this and I have some short shots. For the Horror Writers Workshp in Transylvania this summer I need to submit a longer short story and I’m thinking along the magical realism lines. So comforting to believe that loved ones are still among us, or not.

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    1. Thank you. I enjoyed writing this one. 🙂 Good luck with your short story – I’ve not written much over 1000 words since I discovered flash fiction and I’m starting to feel the need to write something a little longer!

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