The Search
“They were around here somewhere. I swear!” Tynen scrambled recklessly over the rocks ahead, peering into each nook and cranny with almost feverish intensity.
Velana followed at a slower pace, choosing each footstep carefully as she climbed the craggy slope. “No one’s found any in years, Ty. Admit it – you imagined ’em.”
Her brother glared. “No. They were here.”
“Well they ain’t here now.”
“They are. We just need t’ keep looking.”
Velana rolled her eyes but followed Tynen further up the craggy slope. Grandma had told her to follow the brat, so follow him she would.
“I dunno why you’re so bloody excited, anyway,” she said. “It’s just a mushroom-”
Tynen turned, waving his arms extravagantly as he teetered on the edge of a rock. “But it’s not ‘just ‘a mushroom’, Vel! It’s the most delicious mushroom ever. You’ve never tasted anything like Grandma’s mushroom soup!” He returned to his hunt.
Velana shook her head and stomped in his wake.” Food!” she said in disgust. “Why’s it always about the bloody food?”
Word Count: 175
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This post is for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. This week’s prompt was provided by Pamela S. Canepa. Thank you, Pamela!
I’ve actually had this written for several days, but I wasn’t sure whether or not to post it. Whilst I like the interplay between the characters (they were very enjoyable to write), I find the story itself just a little ‘blah’. I decided in the end that I may as well post it. I’d love to know what you think.
An Enchanted Place 
I enjoyed reading this!
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Hahaha! Little brother wants the delicious mushrooms and sister isn’t too happy about that. Cute story Louise!
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Funny…it sounds like she has more important things to do than look for special mushrooms. Cute story …could easily be real life situation.
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Of course it’s all about the food. Grandma’s mushroom soup sounds worth the trouble 🙂
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Tynen definitely thinks so, though his sister’s not so sure! Thanks for visiting, Ali. 🙂
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so clever!!
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Creative and fun take on this prompt!
The Mine
Annie at ~McGuffy’s Reader~
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Boys are always thinking with their stomachs.
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Very true! Thanks for reading. 🙂
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Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
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Thank you. 🙂
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I can understand why you might think it’s a little “blah”, but I don’t think it is. It’s a great interplay and a look into character development. You gave us a lot about their personalities in just a few words.
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Thank you Russell. I really enjoyed writing the interplay between these two characters, but just felt the final story lacked a little spark. I’m glad you thought it worked. 🙂
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